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Post by rasinah on Nov 18, 2004 0:37:17 GMT -5
Finally it's done. *heaves sigh of relief* Short info about this fic: Inspired by the song 'Superwoman' by Karen White. Was studying for my exam when this song aired on the radio (Class 95FM is the best radio station ever!) and wham! all the ideas started flowing. Probably a reason why I couldn't concentrate much then but heck! Title: Sweet Beginning, Bitter End Genre: Dramatic angst Setting: Post-journey Pairing: 383, 58 (SanzoxHakkaixSanzo, GojyoxHakkai) Rated: PG-13 Warnings: Lime, swearing, domestic, emotinal distress to angst-intolerant XD Current status: Prologue up. Enjoy! (hopefully) ^____^;; Note: I know there are a number of 585 fans here. If you guys decide to read my fic, I'm most humbled. But should you find it's not to your liking, I do hope you'll refrain from flaming me. I know you guys won't (right? XD).... To cesmith: I hope you enjoy this. I thank you so much for your trust and support in me. I love you!! Link: www.fanfiction.net/s/2139426/1/
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Post by Blood_Debt on Nov 18, 2004 1:29:00 GMT -5
The word 'bitter end' hooked me. I just love unhappy endings. I liked the beginning, but I reckon you should up the rating to 'R'. However, my rating definition may differ to others. I skipped the middle/end cos I'm a bit of a prude *furious blush*... sorry...
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Post by Me-Nuriko on Nov 18, 2004 6:17:13 GMT -5
I like your writing, so of course I went to read it at once. I don't really like bitter ends, though, I'm a sucker for happy endings. That you write 38 and I write 58 doesn't bother me. (Guess it's bother you more, since I don't think you read 58 ) Anyway, the prologue I like. You describe Sanzo's lust, and reasoning with himself very nicely. As I said I like happy endings, and the loneliness you have set up for here, isn't really what I like to read, unless I know i'ts a happy ending. But that's just me, and I can't help but like your stories, so I'm just reading them anyway. ;D I'm far from prude so I don't have a problem reading this, but I do agree with Blood_Depth, it is an 'R'-rating. When I read what I just have written again, it feels a little negative. That's not what I mean. I like it, I'm just too tired after working all night, to write something more meaningful.
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Post by cesmith on Nov 18, 2004 6:51:59 GMT -5
rasinah, as I said in the email, I really love the opening and am looking forward to what will come. I forgot to mention that I too think the rating should be upped to an R.
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Post by KarotsaMused on Nov 18, 2004 20:11:30 GMT -5
Criticisms: That is R writing. Holy CRAPOLA. Emeralds! Sorry, had to say it. Perhaps it was just the sensuality of the scene, but a bit of this bordered on sap. I may just be desensitized to sexual scenes, though. (And I myself am cold and mathematical. In fact, just ignore all of that. ) Now then. *Clears throat* GAH! ;D I shudder with the happies - I am, sorry to say, rather unfamiliar with your writing style and I was pleasantly surprised, borderline impressed, with the way you work. I adore bittersweetness, so long as it is done well. No pressure but with that prologue I expect much from you. I do write (mostly) 585, but I *love* 38 spliced with a bit of pain in it. (*thinks to her three 38 fics*) Okay lots of pain. Looking forward to an update!
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Post by rasinah on Nov 19, 2004 6:01:18 GMT -5
Ah, thank you all who commented. Truly a pleasure to be of service. And yes, thank you for the heads-up on the rating issue. Have already upped it to R, but since ffnet is on read-mode only, don't know whether the change is reflected or not. Well then... just a bit of comments though. Blood-Debt: So sorry to make you squirm. But hee, thanks for sticking till the end. Me-Nuriko: I do read 58 actually. And I've just finished reading yours by the way (Cho Hakkai:Murderer?). I had the whole 11 chappies saved on my drive then I printed them out (cuz reading off the screen gives me a headache). I enjoyed it muchly!! cesmith: Aww, thanks. Am just so glad you like it. *smiles* KarotsaMused: Eeep, one of the fandom's finest 585 writer is reading my fic? Geh... this is too embarassing. *blushes* And uwaa, you shouldn't have said this "No pressure but with that prologue I expect much from you." I might as well start digging up my own grave. *sobz*
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Post by Me-Nuriko on Nov 19, 2004 6:25:27 GMT -5
Wow, you've read my long story! And liked it? Thanks, I'm flattered. Don't dig your grave, just continue to write the way you use to, and you'll do just fine.
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Post by KarotsaMused on Nov 19, 2004 18:39:46 GMT -5
*falls out of chair* You really think that? *happy tear* Aw! *hug*
Hey, the only reason I said that I expect greatness from you is that you've shown me the potential to live up to that expectation. I don't say that lightly - and therein lies the compliment. Write for yourself, and (*salinger reference!*) do it with all your might! I really am looking forward to where you take this, and the growth that you inevitably will show as you wrote it. But more than anything, I don't want to intimidate you!
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Post by elven dreamer on Nov 20, 2004 0:54:57 GMT -5
It's been put up to an R. Looking forwards to the next few chapters. Are they all gonna be all limey and all? Or was that just to ... introduce the idea? KarotsaMused: rasinah not alone there. You have to be one of my fave Saiyuki authors.....actually, just one of my fav authors. Breakroom! Breakroom!! And 58 has gotta be my fav pairing...so glad you write it ;D
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Post by Blood_Debt on Nov 22, 2004 3:49:06 GMT -5
I'd like to keep reading... oi, e-d, can you censor it for me? ;D Cos I do like your style of writing.
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Post by elven dreamer on Nov 22, 2004 6:12:52 GMT -5
*rolls eyes* What am I, your personal slave? Don't answer that. And there's no need to censor it. Just to warn you when there's a chance that your anti-hentai mind may affect your stomach. Trust me, I've read worse. Probably because AB is in first person. You know? And yeah, your writing's real nice. Hoping for more... -hint hint-. But I'll wait...I have to....*sob*
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Post by rasinah on Nov 23, 2004 19:37:18 GMT -5
Just a quick pop-in to say I've uploaded Ch1. As I said, updates are once a week so expect them around the same time.
KarotsaMused: *hugs* Thanks for the encouraging words. Appreciate 'em very much. ^^
Blood_Debt: Really so sorry once again that you're squirmish. But as elven dreamer said, there are worst (I'm talking about graphic here) reads than mine. I thought mine was pretty mild actually, which was why I assumed PG-13 was ok in the first place. ^^;;
elven dreamer: No worries, the lime scene is only in Prologue. As you said, it is just to intro the idea. Also because I want to set a contrast between prologue and the coming chapters (the whole Sweet Beginning, Bitter End thingy) as well as to appease my fellow 383'shippers since most aren't fond of angst ^^;;
Ja!
EDIT: I've broke one of the board's rules. Uwaaa.... *sobz* So in fairness, I removed the whole chunk of what the Mod had mentioned in a later post.
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Post by elven dreamer on Nov 23, 2004 20:30:38 GMT -5
Woohoo!! New chappie!! ;D
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Post by GlobalMod1 on Nov 24, 2004 1:14:13 GMT -5
Rasinah: I have removed the link in your previous post, because it's stated in the boardrules:
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Post by rasinah on Nov 24, 2004 8:54:33 GMT -5
Rasinah: I have removed the link in your previous post, because it's stated in the boardrules: AM SO SORRRRRYYY.... *bows low* WILL KEEP THAT IN MIND!!!! SO SOOOORRRYYYYY!!!!! ><
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