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Post by treneka on Dec 12, 2004 23:42:00 GMT -5
Just read the latest chapter - thought it was great as usual, albeit with some rather disturbing aspects. The Homura/Goku dynamic is touching in a train-wreck sort of way (i.e. it is sweet and romantic, but with a dark, warped, illegal underbelly - enthralling yet simultaneously horrifying). One wonders why Homura pursues it, but then his motives are understandably obscure. I like the fact that you don't explain them, yet still manage to characterize his behavior vis a vis the relationship with a consistency that indicates you've determined for yourself already what they are.
Of course, I truly enjoyed the Goku/Sanzo-ikou interaction. I'd often wondered how a fight between them might resolve itself (in the absence of Seiten's trump). I have to wonder, however, why Homura held Shien and Xenon back. After all, he already has Goku - why be lenient with unecessary others?
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Post by Dchan on Dec 13, 2004 0:23:34 GMT -5
That's actually a really good question. I feel no qualms answering that one, since I'm fairly sure I didn't make it perfectly clear. But basically. Homura still needs Goku to be strong, otherwise the new world can't be made. The storyline is exactly the same in that sense, so in this world, this is how Homura trains him to become stronger. Zenon and Shien's help would only hinder the process.
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Post by KarotsaMused on Dec 15, 2004 21:38:33 GMT -5
It makes a lot of sense - although you never said that outright, it was definitely inferred. After all, why the heck else would Zenon and Shien have little 'training' sessions with Goku every day? As a way to pass the time, I'm sure they could have come up with much more enjoyable alternatives. Checkers, for one
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Post by lazy treneka on Jan 8, 2005 11:20:19 GMT -5
Well, ffnet is not letting me review for some reason, so I thought I'd drop you a line here. This latest chapter was quite nicely done. I am impressed by your handling of Zenon, particularly, as that character feels very, for lack of a better term, real. He has a nice depth, while not straying from his identifying outer facades, and his interactions with Goku admit the reader in a way the somewhat more dramatic relationships of Goku and Homura or Goku and Sanzo do not. One feels as though one has an 'in' in the character of the one-eyed red-head and that in itself is disturbingly enjoyable in its implications.
Now as always, a question: is Homura meant to come off as one who really should be on suicide watch? Something about the way he is distancing himself and looking beyond his 'friends' is starting to feel very unsettling. Is that intentional?
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Post by D-chan on Jan 8, 2005 16:37:41 GMT -5
Now as always, a question: is Homura meant to come off as one who really should be on suicide watch? Something about the way he is distancing himself and looking beyond his 'friends' is starting to feel very unsettling. Is that intentional? *muses* That's a good question, and I'm not sure how to answer without giving any big spoilers... But I do want the reader to feel uneasy about Homura's intentions. In the anime, when one thinks about it, Homura's intentions were suicidal, even if the situation wasn't quite as drastic as I'm making it out to be in my own story. ... so yes. I think it's safe to say it's intentional. <3
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Post by D-chan on Sept 4, 2005 20:21:33 GMT -5
Just as a quick notice:
The last chapter of Perfect World -- chapter 37 -- is complete and now up on fanfiction.net.
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*gets to work on the sequel* @_____@;;
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