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Post by Terra Fire on Jun 18, 2005 15:56:58 GMT -5
Thanks. Though, here's something I never thought that I would ask for this story. Does anyone have any ideas? I have a main, cut and dry plot, but nothing in between. What I mean, is that I have nothing to fill the gaps. So, if any one has any thoughts, please let me know. ;} ~VGT~
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Post by Terra Fire on Sept 29, 2005 12:06:17 GMT -5
*Dances around and sings*
...I updated. I updated. I updated...
I'm so happy I was able to update!
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Post by narrizan on Sept 29, 2005 13:20:19 GMT -5
hey dear hope you're enjoying being nineteen!... good to see your update and i actually tried to leave a review, but ff said that the story didn't exist and couldn't be reviewed... a nice chapter, the dialogue is well written, and typo wise you have improved although a couple of mistakes still crept through..so if i may, and no offense intended : "It was the first time that memory came back to him sense his imprisonment." - i think you mean to use 'since' and not 'sense' "All he could to do was fallow his instincts and think of Shuro" - also here 'follow' instead of 'fallow'. "While in a feudal attempt to rip the whip lose,.." - here also i think you mean 'futile' and not 'feudal'. as i said, no offense meant. these are proper words so sometimes even spellchecker doesn't help. just sometimes you have to be extra vigilant no one is immune to them! ^_^. much love- zan
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Post by Terra Fire on Oct 2, 2005 11:53:30 GMT -5
Thanks. No offense taken, I've always had problems like this when it come to words. I guess some habits are harder to break than others.
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Post by cesmith on Jan 5, 2006 7:54:15 GMT -5
I know you've been busy with school and have had computer problems but I was hoping that there might be a new chapter in the works sometime soon??? You left us with Sanzo in the maze, Hakkai cruelly injured, and the battles roaring on. I would love to see how this story continues.
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Post by Terra Fire on Jan 6, 2006 16:04:46 GMT -5
Sorry Ces, I've been neglecting MC (along with everything else), because I'm really sick and haven't been able to go ANYWHERE. However, I hope to get it done soon (at leasr I hope so).
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Post by cesmith on Jan 6, 2006 20:19:18 GMT -5
Sorry to hear that you've been sick. This is a rotten time of year not to feel well. I hope you will feel better soon, and I'll look forward to MC when you can write it.
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Post by Terra Fire on May 1, 2006 13:28:17 GMT -5
Alright, I need help! I've been stuck on this one part in chapter eleven now for the past few months, and I know that the few people who are still actually reading this story are annoyed. This one part is where Goku and Kou are fighting. I just can't do it. I know who I want to win, but I just don't know how to do it. It's a small area where Goku can't use his staff, and Kou can't use his spells without hurting others. I just finnished reading a few of the mangas, (don't think I'm supost to put an 's' on the end of that), where Goku and Kou are fighting, but it really didn't do much. I even tried puting a nice poster of the boys on my wall, but it still didn't do anything. So, I would like to ask for someone's help on this. It's just giving me way too much dificulty. ;} ~VGT~
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Post by Terra Fire on May 1, 2006 13:30:59 GMT -5
Also, how would everyone feel if I took a break on Sanzo and Goku (but on ly a bit), and focused more on the others. Mainly Hakkai and Gojyo, and how they got to be in MC?
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Post by cesmith on May 14, 2006 22:50:02 GMT -5
How and why Gojyo and Hakkai are in Muerte Carcel are questions I've been curious about since I first started reading your story, so I certainly wouldn't mind you focusing on the two of them for a while.
As for Kou and Goku fighting. if neither could use their unique skills, it would either end up a rather brutal fistfight, or two opponents trying hard to win without really hurting their fellow fighter.
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Post by Terra Fire on May 17, 2006 14:40:36 GMT -5
See, that's my dilemma. The two are friends (rivals in strength, but still good friends), so I really don't want a brutal fist fight. And to have a sudden KO with either of them (in a fist fight), would be very insulting to the character and to the readers. So, do you think that it would be too much out-of-the-box for them to use their special skills but still hurt some of the on-lookers? If I do that, then I may have to change a few things later in the long run (don't know what though).
Anyway, besides that, I do have a few ideas. Mainly on the other characters, *cough* Hakkai *cough* and how they got locked up in the first place.
I really have been neglecting my writing lately (*months*), and I think that with the spring and summer coming up, I'll be able to write more. It's just that, I'm never really able too write much in winter. I think that it's because I go into this nice little bubble during the winter, and I don't do much of anything.
Well, this is starting to get a bit off topic, so I'll just leave it at that for now.
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Post by cesmith on May 17, 2006 15:29:42 GMT -5
Whether Kou would want to hurt onlookers or not, I'm not sure from your story yet because we really haven't seen too much of his personality, BUT I do not think Goku would willingly or accidentally hurt someone. After all, he offered himself up to the warden (sorry, I'm horrible at remembering names) just so others wouldn't be tortured/injured/molested.
If the reward for winning was something important to each of them (IE, Sanzo being safe from harm for Goku), then I think each of them would fight until there was a winner. After all, that's how it is in the anime really. They could be friends but their objectives keep them apart.
I never complain about Hakkai stories, since he has always been my favorite.
And as for being off topic, it's your MB section and you can go as far off topic as you wish, besides it isn't really off topic explaining why you don't write much in the winter. I really look forward to your next chapter.
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